I really enjoyed the story as it is shaping up so far. For me personally, I am far more interested in the wrestling side than the incest storyline though - especially as that aspect is really full on - so I will just see how that goes for the future, but I appreciate your writing, characterization and the passion you show about wrestling world context.
Despite not originally intending this to be a visual novel on renpy you also are doing an amazing job, and I think the renders with the facial expressions are really good. Any comments are just my thoughts and I completely respect this is your project.
--- Mild Spoilers---
Some feedback.
* I think perhaps some of the threatening behavior by the main character and the sister really gave a bad impression about them. If the story was more comical then I could just pass it off as slapstick yandere behavior, but because you had just established carefully the reality of toxic aggression and violent threats it felt really awkward. You had just shown rightly how bad the father was for behaving in in this way. Then the next thing the [sister] is threatening a random girl with smashing her with a chair for talking to the MC, and later the MC is threatening to break some guys legs for showing even a passing interest in the sister. In the context of you trying to tell a serious story with consequences about behavior this makes them look a bit unhinged and I instantly thought 'Well, they certainly inherited some things from their messed up dad.' If that is important for the story then at the very least it is perhaps something that needs to be seriously called out. As I would as a reader suggest it looks like the first seeds of them ending up like their father.
* I also think in general choices will be important and you should do you're best to factor them in. I accept that the parent and the older sister character are obligatory romances, I am not really a fan of the mum as a romance, but for the sake of the story I get it, but I think too many forced romances can be quite off-putting.
Hey, after such hard work, I couldn't not buy it. Just tested it out, and it works just fine, sitting at the dinner table now with mom, ready for my last day of school :-) Thx !
Did you buy an Apple dev license? Most AVNs I need to go into Apple preferences, privacy to insist that Yes, I want to play this game. Yours just started right up, no extra hoops to jump through.
I actually have no idea what an Apple dev license is so I definitely did not buy one lol. I just did the exact same thing as packaging the game for Windows or Android, but I clicked “Mac” instead. Nothing else lol. Glad to hear it all worked out though!
Thanks for the support and I hope you enjoy Wrestling Dynasty!
hello. i just ran the game and i am a blind player. from the get go the game is accessible. you are a lone developer so i really really appreciate the accessibility that you put into the game. thank you for your work and keep it up. i will comment later when i have played more of it. thanks again and you rock.
I am a bit confused, love the premise of the VN and it appears to be getting regular updates. However my confusion relates to the downloads being labeled as demo.
Hi friend, and thanks for the interest! The “Demo” label is because development was originally made in Twine as an HTML game, but after feedback, I moved the game to Ren’Py and put out a “Ren’Py Demo” as a tester to see if people preferred the game this way as opposed to going back to the text-based Twine HTML game.
The feedback was overwhelmingly in support of continuing in Ren’Py, and thus the next full update, in Ren’Py, will be out soon!
To be honest, I don’t know enough about Ren’Py yet to give a confident answer, so I’ll just say that it would be for the better if it required a new game.
However, the new update (coming out soon) will give you the following 3 options at the beginning:
← Return to game
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So like can I buy your game or is it free
The game is and will always be free :)
Sensational 😃
Really good writing. Made a donation. Wish it could have been more. Looking forward to seeing more!
Hey, thanks so much!
I really enjoyed the story as it is shaping up so far. For me personally, I am far more interested in the wrestling side than the incest storyline though - especially as that aspect is really full on - so I will just see how that goes for the future, but I appreciate your writing, characterization and the passion you show about wrestling world context.
Despite not originally intending this to be a visual novel on renpy you also are doing an amazing job, and I think the renders with the facial expressions are really good. Any comments are just my thoughts and I completely respect this is your project.
--- Mild Spoilers---
Some feedback.
* I think perhaps some of the threatening behavior by the main character and the sister really gave a bad impression about them.
If the story was more comical then I could just pass it off as slapstick yandere behavior, but because you had just established carefully the reality of toxic aggression and violent threats it felt really awkward. You had just shown rightly how bad the father was for behaving in in this way. Then the next thing the [sister] is threatening a random girl with smashing her with a chair for talking to the MC, and later the MC is threatening to break some guys legs for showing even a passing interest in the sister. In the context of you trying to tell a serious story with consequences about behavior this makes them look a bit unhinged and I instantly thought 'Well, they certainly inherited some things from their messed up dad.' If that is important for the story then at the very least it is perhaps something that needs to be seriously called out. As I would as a reader suggest it looks like the first seeds of them ending up like their father.
* I also think in general choices will be important and you should do you're best to factor them in. I accept that the parent and the older sister character are obligatory romances, I am not really a fan of the mum as a romance, but for the sake of the story I get it, but I think too many forced romances can be quite off-putting.
No Mac version? Using Renpy it should be fairly easy?
I will make a Mac version just for you. Check back sometime tomorrow <3
Holy fuck I drank too much yesterday and forgot about this, very sorry! I’ll start on the Mac build now.
Okay, the Mac build is now available to download! I cannot test it myself so I’ll just blindly hope everything works! Sorry about that.
Hey, after such hard work, I couldn't not buy it. Just tested it out, and it works just fine, sitting at the dinner table now with mom, ready for my last day of school :-) Thx !
Did you buy an Apple dev license? Most AVNs I need to go into Apple preferences, privacy to insist that Yes, I want to play this game. Yours just started right up, no extra hoops to jump through.
I actually have no idea what an Apple dev license is so I definitely did not buy one lol. I just did the exact same thing as packaging the game for Windows or Android, but I clicked “Mac” instead. Nothing else lol. Glad to hear it all worked out though!
Thanks for the support and I hope you enjoy Wrestling Dynasty!
hello. i just ran the game and i am a blind player. from the get go the game is accessible. you are a lone developer so i really really appreciate the accessibility that you put into the game. thank you for your work and keep it up. i will comment later when i have played more of it. thanks again and you rock.
Android download isn't working
The new update releases tomorrow with a new Android build as well! Sorry about that.
hyped for upcoming release of update 2 and i hope this comment helps with algorithm
I am a bit confused, love the premise of the VN and it appears to be getting regular updates. However my confusion relates to the downloads being labeled as demo.
Hi friend, and thanks for the interest! The “Demo” label is because development was originally made in Twine as an HTML game, but after feedback, I moved the game to Ren’Py and put out a “Ren’Py Demo” as a tester to see if people preferred the game this way as opposed to going back to the text-based Twine HTML game.
The feedback was overwhelmingly in support of continuing in Ren’Py, and thus the next full update, in Ren’Py, will be out soon!
Thank you for the clarification, Will the next update require a restart?
To be honest, I don’t know enough about Ren’Py yet to give a confident answer, so I’ll just say that it would be for the better if it required a new game.
However, the new update (coming out soon) will give you the following 3 options at the beginning:
Ok I'll just wait for the next update
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I enjoyed the first 4 chapters. Looking forward to the next.
Great start and if you haven't played it yet, you're missing out.
This is great so far; might be peak
really great start.